Wednesday, September 7, 2011

Rewrite Robinson Crusoe

Rewrite ‘Robinson Crusoe’

The time goes back to in the early 1960s.

Crusoe refused his father’s persuasion and started a sea voyage. He is sailing with his crews, Friday and Sam. Each days of the last few months were survive days because of the tough waves and storms. Crusoe and his crews are became exhausted to sail in the ship. They pray to find a land where they can stay only few days.

Then suddenly one of crews, Sam saw the small island and told to Crusoe.

Crusoe screamed, “Land ho!”

“Really? Our pray are accepted! Finally we did it everyone!” Friday said.

Sam is pleased that he can stand in a flatland. “Go go let’s go! It’s been a long time that we step the land.”

“Yeah it is. I can’t believe now. Guys, Let’s do firstly collect some branches and tree bushes to make the house.” Crusoe lead the crews.

The first day was passed through with their loud happy voices. While Crusoe and crews are staying, they gather foods from the trees. If it is a lucky day, they can hunt animals and even birds with guns which they brought to. Although they planned to stay few days, they are so satisfied in peaceful days.

One day, Crusoe witnesses a raft which is floating far from the land. There is also a person who is lying on the raft.

“Hey! Hey” Crusoe yelled at him. But there was no answer. Crusoe activates the ship to rescue the person. The person hasn’t dead yet.

“He is still breathing. Wake up, hey wake up!” Crusoe was trying to wake up him but he didn’t.

Sam and Friday shift the man in the warmer place where next to fire and covered him with several blankets. Then few hours later, he woke up.

Sam asked “Are you feeling better now?”

“Where am I?”

“You were in the floating raft, what’s happened to you? Ah sorry, my name is Sam and he is Friday”

“My name is Xury. I was trying to escape from pirate with my friends. But there was a hurricane and the ship was crack and shattered. I can’t remember then...where is my friends?” He sobbed.

“Crusoe said when he first found you there was no one with you, sorry. Eat something and take a rest more. I think you need some more rest. ”

Friday stayed next to him until he go back to sleep. Sam goes to Crusoe and telling Xury’s stories.

“How poor he is...His face looks young isn’t he?” Crusoe worried.

“Yes. I wanted to talk with him more but he looks very exhausted so I couldn’t.”

Crusoe and the crews talked about Xury until late night. In the early morning, they had a breakfast and asked Xury to stay with them.

Xury hesitated. “Is that okay? I know that there is no choice in my situation now but...”

Sam makes him feel reliable. “We all agreed that you can stay with us. If you are with us, we can get one more hand to go England. And it will be safe. Actually Friday was also rescued by Crusoe from sea robber.

Friday spoke stammering. “He is a really good Captain.”

Sam explained why he is stammering. “As you can see, Friday is African so he isn’t good at speaking English. Crusoe asked me to teach English so he is getting better slowly. He was in slave a status for a long time. We also made a name for Friday that is come from the time when we first meet. It must be horrible time to him. Friday has similar situation like you, Xury. So don’t worry. We will protect you.”

“We are all fine that you can stay with us. Maybe we are leaving to go England next week when we get ready.” Crusoe also makes Xury to feel relieved.

After then, Crusoe, Friday, Sam and Xury stay together in the land and prepare to leave. Crusoe and Sam are prefixing the ship to be safe before sailing. Xury and Friday are gathering useful sources from surroundings.



Crusoe and his crews, include Xury finished organising to start sea voyage again. They all have great condition and the weather is very nice to sailing so everyone is excited.

“The weather is really nice, isn’t it?”

“Yes, Captain. I’m really excited!”

Crusoe powerfully shouted. “Let’s go guys!”

The Crusoe’s ship moved smoothly and left the land. The blue sky is surrounded with shiny sun and high cloud. The sea is calm. Everything is perfectly going.

One day, Crusoe see something again.

Crusoe commanded to Friday, “Friday! Bring me a telescope!”

“Here it is, Captain. What’s happen?”

“I think there are people in a small boat, over there! Call everybody, Friday!”

“Yes, captain!”

Friday is hurry to call Xury and Sam and then bring them to Crusoe.

Crusoe passes the telescope which he was taken to Sam. “Sam, look at that. Is that a person over there near the land?”

Sam tilted his head sideways and said “I think so…let’s go closer.”

The ship is changed its destination and moved to them. As Crusoe said, the people in the little wood boat were pushed to near the land because of the sea wave. Sam is landed the ship in the island safely and follows Xury, Friday and Crusoe. The women have a paled face.

“I told you. It was right! Are you okay?”

Xury got worried. “They both have paled faces. The body is full of bruised injuries. We have to make their body warm first and treat them. Let’s move!”

Crusoe and all crews behave rapidly. They have been sailing together for several months so they apparently know what they need to do except Xury who has been joined just few days. Two unknown women’s face and their body temperature are getting recovered. When the women woke up, they had a horrified face.

Crusoe begins to speak when he saw their face. “Don’t be scared. Are you feeling
better now?”

The women are just nodding.

Friday and Sam gave some foods to them. “Eat these foods.”

When they hold the dishes, one woman ate hurriedly but another woman didn’t eat.

Xury is worried and spoke. “You need to eat. I think you had collapsed in the sea for a long time.”

The woman who has just finished eating said first. “I will keep the rest of foods and give it to her later. Don’t worry and thank you so much.”

Crusoe asked the crews to move and set the tent where the women can stay in.

Crusoe decided to stay in this island. When all crews are getting to sleep, Crusoe have a time to pray about his current occasion to the God. He always prays to make feel comfortable by himself, if Crusoe have some troubles. By having a religious belief, he might be able to rely on someone. Christianity faith is one of the powers that Crusoe can endure this challenging journey. As Crusoe is only the person who has a responsibility to lead the crews, Sam, Xury, Friday and also two women. He has getting stress and worried that he can lead them to go England safely.

Next day, Crusoe called Sam and told him what he thought last night. Crusoe thinks if he is going to go England with the women, it will be a good idea that asked them to do chores. In fact, he is thinking to make them as slaves. This idea could be release Crusoe’s stress and do other important works as in captain’s position.

Crusoe makes an effort to put his thinking that he has a right plan into Sam’s head. “We rescued them and provided foods. It is a good idea that we asked them to do it!”

Although Sam is the closest person to Crusoe, he dares not think of disagreeing to Captain’s saying. Also Crusoe’s attitude was very heavy-handed. “I agree with you, Captain”

“They have no choice. They can’t escape from here by just that small boat.”

“I understand. When they woke up, I will bring them to you, Captain.”

When two women woke up, Sam leads them to meet Crusoe.

“How are you? Are you feeling better now?”

One woman answered while another woman doesn’t have any change on her face like yesterday. “Yes, thank you Captain. Ah, I forgot to introduce us. My name is Dana and I’m working under Yulia.”

Xury came suddenly and standing with Friday. “Her name is Yulia! That’s pretty name like your face.”

Sam immediately responded. “That’s right.”

“Dana and Yulia, could you do work for us during we stay here together?”

Yulia is surprised and whispered to Dana. Dana’s face is getting dark.

Dana spoke. “Hum...alright. I will take everything instead of Yulia. So just tell
me, Captain.”

Crusoe unpleasantly answered. “No. You both have to do work together. Yulia, you
too.”

Crusoe and his crews were curious about Dana’s saying but Captain didn’t mention it. Sam and Xury look back what Dana’s saying and deduce of two unidentified women. They think that there is something special relationship between Dana and Yulia. It isn’t just merely like a friend.

At that night, Crusoe is taking a rest in standing near the sea. He heard extremely tiny whispered voice and follows it by holding his breath.

Yulia pushed Dana. “Do not tell our relationship. It should never happen, Dana!”

“I know. I’m trying to do my best as I can. I won’t tell that.”

He is realised that there is surely something while he was listening their conversation.

Next day, Dana woke up early in the morning. She is preparing breakfast. Last night, Friday taught her the construction of ship so that she can figure out the foods or items what she needs. At the same time, Yulia is just watching Dana’s doing in seating beside her.

Sam is satisfied when he looked the dishes. “Wow, it looks really delicious!”

Xury and Friday are also pleased “Umm, nice smell. It’s been a long time that someone prepares breakfast for me. It was always Friday and my job.”

Crusoe didn’t say anything and silently just eat. After having a meal, Crusoe called Yulia and Dana loudly. “After washing the dishes, you should clean my ship. Be Touch it carefully.”

Dana takes all the chores and works that Captain asked to do every day. When she is getting exhausted, Yulia pretends to work together with Dana when Crusoe is watching her.

On a nice sunshine day, Yulia and Dana are cleaning and Friday is studying English. Sam is staring at Crusoe. Crusoe is reading a Bible.

Sam initiates talking to Crusoe. “What are you going to do with Yulia and Dana? Are you just let them like now?”

Crusoe simply answered. “Yes, By the way, I’m thinking what I should do if I want to establish a colony with this land?”

“Well, I don’t know well like you, Captain. I’m sorry.” Sam spoke and left him.

While Crusoe is considering, one huge ship is coming closely to the land. Friday and Sam are surprised and screamed.

Xury and Friday are shouted. “Ca..Capatin!!!!!!!That ship is getting closer to us.”

Crusoe is just staring without any answered. There are some people in the ship. The ship is magnificent and the air looks very dark.

“They seem like a pirate. Who are you?”

One pirate who looks like a captain asked to Crusoe. - “Hi, We are come from Brazil. Can we stay here just few days? I think my ship got some problems so it needs to repair.”

“Oh that’s really bad. It’s okay.”

The crews are afraid of Brazilian pirate because their faces are threatening. However, Crusoe doesn’t feel any difficult to him. He is getting closer and their relationship also became deeper. Even they are having a serious talk. The Brazilian pirate’s captain also thinks Crusoe as a friend.

One day, the pirate feels that the Crusoe’s crews have a strong loyalty of obeying Crusoe. He became want the crews to make his slave.

Pirate captain carefully spoke. “Crusoe, your crews obey you with a strong faithful.”

“Are they? They all have their own dynamic stories. But actually Friday isn’t good as much as those two women. Although Sam has been taught him English language for last few months, he doesn’t show the development. I think black person isn’t better than white person in any particular field. Sam is trying to teach our valuable English language to Friday with Xury’s help. I’m planning to change his religion someday. He needs God’s help. He might change because he is relying on me.”

“That’s good. Crusoe look, I need someone who can be helpful and useful to me and my people. Could you give me any person? I won’t be refused so it is okay the person who has different races or genders. I want one of your people. I’m really exhausted that handling by myself. I will give you money as much as I can sufficiently compensate.”

After pirate captain spoke, Crusoe couldn’t refuse the money so he considers the person who will be hand to him.

Crusoe said to himself. ‘Sam is the most helpful and essential person to me. Xury
and Friday have a strong trustful and faithful. Yulia and Dana, two women slaves are easy to handle by my control. Hum...If I sell one person, it will help me to colonise this land. I have to decide!”

Few days later when the pirate ship is ready to repair to leave, Crusoe and pirate captain lastly meet.

“Have you thought about it, Crusoe?”

“Yes. How about Xury and Friday? Can you give me more money?”

“Okay, I will bring them. Here is money that I prepare to give you. So this is all done that our trade is accomplished. Goodbye my friend Crusoe. I hope that we can meet someday.”

“Thank you. Nice to see you too. Take care!”

Xury and Friday don’t know the reason. They just follow what Crusoe said to do. Then the ship is left. All people who are staying with Crusoe are surprised and asked him.

Sam yelled, “What are you doing, Captain?”

“Pirate captain asked me that he wants someone who having strong faithful. I thought Xury and Friday are those people. Don’t care about it. Don’t ask me questions anymore.”

“Bu..But..you are too cruel. It was..” Sam blames Crusoe.

Sam has got shocked. Yulia and Dana are also surprised and feeling scary. Since then, Yulia starts to do works by helping Dana even it is simple chores. She thinks if she didn’t do anything for him, he will sell to threatening pirate someday like Xury and Friday.

Yulia firstly talked to Crusoe. “Do you need something that I can do for you, Captain?”

“No.” He uninterestingly answered.

Yulia is looking around to find Dana and said with horrified voice. “Dana, can we survive from that cruel Captain? Are there any ways to escape here?”

“It’s impossible. We don’t have ship or foods. Here is just Desert Island. There are no ways so we should just stay here and follow Captain.”

Three months passed away quickly.

One day, Crusoe spoke while they are having a dinner.

“Let’s restart sailing to go England.”

“Really, Captain?” Yulia and Dana are pleased to hear that Crusoe’s saying. ‘Yeah!
We can survive from here!’

“Yes, Get ready to go guys.”

However, Sam is still upset to Crusoe that sent Xury and Friday to get the money even it was long time ago. Crusoe wants to turn his mind.

“Hey, Sam. What are you doing?”

Sam just looked at Crusoe once and didn’t answer.

“If I didn’t do that, we shouldn’t leave here. At that time, I wanted to colonise this island but our destination is to go England, right? I need you, Sam. We are the closest people in here.”

Through they are having a talk, Sam is slowly turning his mind and understanding his current position.

Next day, Crusoe sets the ship’s sail in a long time. The people are excited to go the new place.

Crusoe spoke “The weather is fine and God will lead us that we can arrive safely. When I see the map, it won’t take a long time. I think it is closer from here. Let’s go!”

All crews undertake each own job and doing it well. As Crusoe said, there was no tough wave to threat the ship. Suddenly England land shows up.

During last few months, there were many happenings which can be good or bad. However, Crusoe is proud of himself. He feels really great about achieve the purpose of sailing. After then, one idea is suddenly raised up in his head.

‘It will be great that I publish a book about this sailing experience.’

Crusoe is planning to do it when he has a time. Finally, the ship is arrived at the destination.

Crusoe and Sam are feel relieved and hug to celebrate. “Thank you, Sam. It’s all your efforts that we can successfully finish our sailing. I won’t forget that.”

“No, Captain. Thank you so much.”

“What are you going to do?”

“I’m not sure. I just want to take a rest and then think about it.”

“That’s good. Take care! I will miss you.

“I will miss you too, Bye Captain.”

“Yulia and Dana, you can go now. Your destination is England as well, right?”

Yulia is hurried to escape the ship without saying. Dana rapidly answered.

“Yes, thank you Captain.” She suddenly remembers something to tell him when the time is to say goodbye.

“Captain, actually Yulia is the princess of England. I’m the maid of her. That’s why she didn’t want to do anything at the first time when we meet. She didn’t want to get married so we escaped and there was a hurricane. I want to apologise instead of her.”

“Never mind, I was thinking that. I heard something when you are talking. So take care.”

Although Crusoe thinks Yulia and Dana as slaves in his ship, he clearly sets up that it isn’t my authority anymore.



Crusoe is writing the story about the sea voyage seating in front of the river. He is reminded the time when he first started the sailing, met Friday, Xury and the two women; Yulia and Dana. There was also the accident meeting with the Brazilian pirate Captain. He had experienced of the several sudden happenings.

‘It was the successful first sailing to me in my life.’

While he was writing, he discovers a little shiny thing in the river.

“What is that?”

He is curious about that shiny thing. So he goes near to the twinkle object. It was a little water bottle which the paper was rolled in inside. Crusoe opens it immediately. It looks like some kinds of island map. Crusoe thinks God gave me directions that it’s time to start my second sailing.

Next day, he repairs the old ship and prepares to depart the sailing.

“Let’s go, Crusoe!”

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