Proposal for re-writing The Old Man and The Sea

The Old Man and The Sea was written by Ernest Miller Hemingway, and because of this symbolistic fiction, Hemingway won the Nobel Prize in 1954. This novel was on the basis of a Cuba fisherman’s real experience. It created a character of an old man who was unbeatable under the stress mentally.

Some reasonable and inspirer words in the fiction are popular today, and the sentence “A man can be destroyed but not defeated.” giving people deep impression in the world. Why? That’s because the dramatis personae Santiago caught nothing during his eighty-four fishing days, but on the eight-fifth day, he caught a big fish and fought against the fish and other sharks on the sea. Although the enemies are strong, he still had the confidence of unbeatable to the end. However, why the old man did not lose heart from the first day to the eight-fifth day? Readers must be interest in it. So I am going to write a story about the old man’s fishing before the eight-fifth day and I also want to show his great spirit in the re-write fiction.

I have written the beginning section of it that is following:

The Past Eighty-four Days

The old man Santiago has waited for his fish for eight-four days, however, till today he has got nothing. In the first forty days, a boy had been with him, but after forty days, the boy’s parents had told him to go because there is no fish they had got in those days. The boy’s parents believe that Santiago is the worst form of unlucky, if the boy stays with him during his all life, the boy will gain nothing. As expected, the boy caught three good fish the first week when he listened to his parents’ orders in another boat. The fact proved that the boy has touched lucky when he departed from Santiago’s boat. At this time, someone must ask: what is Santiago doing now? Does he feel lonely? Or does he enjoy his life when the boy is away? Is he still an unlucky man? So many questions take us to look back on the past eighty-four days…

This is a nice night, Santiago and the boy are having their wonderful dinner, what the delicious dish is their today’s harvest—a big fish. The boy brings some bottles of beer from the Terrace, and brings the latest news of the baseball game that is Santiago’s favorite game. They knock over a drink and talk about the Yankees of the baseball game. It is exactly a nice night to them, and they are even unwilling to think about tomorrow.

“Cheers!” Santiago says, “Let’s drink, and drink heavily!”
“Cheers!” the boy repeats his words.
“I have never so tied like today. I wish both of us have a break day.” Santiago says. His voice is so slight that the boy can not hear what he says clearly.

That’s exactly, the big fish is so amazing, because it not only is sold with a good price, but is cooked like the nice dish which is on the table. This big harvest makes them tied and desiring for a break is a normal idea that people believed. However, something unexpected happens in the following days is what they do not like to wish and to see.


The first following day…

The old man Santiago and the boy got up early as usual, although they were dead drunk last night, they had to ready to put to sea for their catch in this early morning. The boy took the rolls of line in the basket and the harpoon and gaff, and the old man carried the mast with the furled sail on his shoulder.

To be continued……