I was thinking to rewrite the musical show "Miss Saigon". "Miss Saigon" is the story of Kim, a 17 year old Vietnamese orphan who became prostitute in a bar in Saigon to earn for her living. The story started in the beginning of 1975, just some months before American soldiers were completely swiped off Vietnam. Kim met Chris, an American GI on her first day at the bar and the two felt in love. On the day they got married, Kim' cousin, Thuy, to whom she was arranged to marry to at the age of 13 by her parents, came to take her home with him. Chris made Thuy leave the place without Kim and they continued to live happily until the news about Viet Cong going to take Saigon came to tear them apart. Failed to take Kim with him to America, Chris left Vietnam with the promise that he will come back for her.
Three years passed, Chris still couldn't come back due to political issue between America and Vietnam. Chris was married to another woman but Kim was still waiting. Thuy, now became a government commissar, came look for her and determined to bring her home. There she revealed to him that she had a child with Chris so she couldn't come with him. Thuy tried to kill the child but was killed by Kim instead.
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My rewrite will tell Thuy's story and his hatre upon American, which also portrait how people that follows Viet Cong thought about American and the so-called Vietnamese War. It tell the story from the other side, where people believe that the true intension of America back then was to take control of Vietnam and its resource, not to save the world from Communism like Americans always think.
Tuesday, August 23, 2011
Monday, August 22, 2011
Rewrite Plan
Let me know if you think this is gonna fail because I'm not sure if it has enough body to make 3000 words out of it. Should make a good tragedy if I can pull it off though!
(I put rewrite in speech marks because that's what the title of the assignment is called but it isn't really what we're doing considering this is more of a parallel short story than a complete rewrite of the original play/movie)
Sunday, August 21, 2011
Sarah Hosking - First Re-write Draft
I've decided after much thinking to re-write SHE by H.R. Haggard. BEWARE, TYPOS AND GRAMMAR ERROS GALORE
Amahagger Tribe was located deep in the mainland of Africa. There lived Ballali and his people. Once under the spell and harsh control of "SHE" this was no longer true. Outsiders had come from a far away place and rid them of "SHE". He wasn't sure how this could be true, as "SHE" was a particularly powerful woman who had never shown a weakness. Because if he had seen it, she would of been gone and he would of taken control of his people. In truth, it wasn't control he wanted, it was freedom. If it was true that "SHE" was gone and that they were free to live how they wanted then this could only be a good thing. But what now worried Ballali was her return. The Outsiders, who had now become his friends had told him of her possible reincarnation. This arouse many worries in Ballali. The most important one being the fact he'd let the Outsiders go. Not only that, but he had personally escorted them. One solution remained in Ballali's mind. He must leave, or make it seem as though he had left.
A number of years later a chance showed itself. Another Outsider arrived on the Marshes which lay on the outskirts of their province. Ballali was at once shaken awake.
"Juta, what is it my son?" Ballali spoke.
The Amahagger were a incredibly respectful society. Son's were not of blood but a term of respect. Ballali being one of the eldest people in the Amahagger was treated with the greatest respect and was almost always addressed firstly as 'Father'.
"Sorry to awaken you Father but Ubwa and Abuu just returned from the Marshes with reports of Outsiders. What is your wish My Father? Are we to return with them for supper?"
"Ney, ready my cart. I want to speak with these men, I warn you now young Juta, your last feast on flesh will have been the last."
Ballali got to his feet, no longer young and easy to rise. But not yet old enough to give up. The opportunity he had been waiting for finally had come to pass.
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50 years later
Worlds away in the lands north of the Amahaggers province, Ballali's fears were soon to be realised. Ayesha woke with a start, as if she had been startled awake from a dream that had been tormenting her. The cave was black and cold. She stood and brought her hands to her face and starred. Still beautiful and pearly white and wrinkless, despite her 2000 years or so, on earth. She wasn't clothed and knew this would become a problem. Where was she and how did she come to be here? It would seem that no memories had been lost in her reincarnation and these hit her all at once. Ayesha strided towards the stone wall directly infront of her and using her supernatural powers held out her hands and blasted a hole the size of a fully grown elephant through the walls exposing a beam of white light.
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Amahagger Tribe was located deep in the mainland of Africa. There lived Ballali and his people. Once under the spell and harsh control of "SHE" this was no longer true. Outsiders had come from a far away place and rid them of "SHE". He wasn't sure how this could be true, as "SHE" was a particularly powerful woman who had never shown a weakness. Because if he had seen it, she would of been gone and he would of taken control of his people. In truth, it wasn't control he wanted, it was freedom. If it was true that "SHE" was gone and that they were free to live how they wanted then this could only be a good thing. But what now worried Ballali was her return. The Outsiders, who had now become his friends had told him of her possible reincarnation. This arouse many worries in Ballali. The most important one being the fact he'd let the Outsiders go. Not only that, but he had personally escorted them. One solution remained in Ballali's mind. He must leave, or make it seem as though he had left.
A number of years later a chance showed itself. Another Outsider arrived on the Marshes which lay on the outskirts of their province. Ballali was at once shaken awake.
"Juta, what is it my son?" Ballali spoke.
The Amahagger were a incredibly respectful society. Son's were not of blood but a term of respect. Ballali being one of the eldest people in the Amahagger was treated with the greatest respect and was almost always addressed firstly as 'Father'.
"Sorry to awaken you Father but Ubwa and Abuu just returned from the Marshes with reports of Outsiders. What is your wish My Father? Are we to return with them for supper?"
"Ney, ready my cart. I want to speak with these men, I warn you now young Juta, your last feast on flesh will have been the last."
Ballali got to his feet, no longer young and easy to rise. But not yet old enough to give up. The opportunity he had been waiting for finally had come to pass.
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50 years later
Worlds away in the lands north of the Amahaggers province, Ballali's fears were soon to be realised. Ayesha woke with a start, as if she had been startled awake from a dream that had been tormenting her. The cave was black and cold. She stood and brought her hands to her face and starred. Still beautiful and pearly white and wrinkless, despite her 2000 years or so, on earth. She wasn't clothed and knew this would become a problem. Where was she and how did she come to be here? It would seem that no memories had been lost in her reincarnation and these hit her all at once. Ayesha strided towards the stone wall directly infront of her and using her supernatural powers held out her hands and blasted a hole the size of a fully grown elephant through the walls exposing a beam of white light.
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Thursday, August 18, 2011
My re-write idea
I've decided to do a rewrite base on an anime/manga called Kuroshitsuji (Black Butler).
Basically, the original plot line is like this:
In a manor house on the outskirts of Victorian era London, butler Sebastian Michaelis serves Lord Earl Ciel Phantomhive, the orphaned twelve-year-old head of an English noble family and a toy and candy empire, who serves directly under the Queen as her "guard dog". Sebastian carries out any task required by his master while solving the problems plaguing England with ease and perfection, because of his demonic lineage and Faustian contract with his master. The parents of Master Phantomhive estate were murdered when Ciel was younger. As a result, he made a deal with a demon asking for vengeance upon those who had disgraced him, and the Phantomhive name, in exchange for his soul.
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For the first part, I decided that I would like to write my story from Madame Red's Point of view.
Below is a brief description of Madame Red:
Madame Red, born Angelina Durless, was Ciel's aunt. As her title suggests, she was known for her red appearance and clothing. Initially she hated her red hair, which she inherited from her father, until Ciel's father, Vincent, said he liked it. Angelina fell in love with him, but became distraught when she found out her sister was marrying him. Madame Red later married Baron Barnett, who treated her lovingly and gently, stating that he does not mind that she harbors feelings for another. She obtained a medical license against the wishes of her parents and practiced at the Royal London Hospital. After a carriage accident in which her husband was killed, her womb and unborn child had to be removed. This causes her great strife as a doctor because she regularly performs abortions on prostitutes because they believe having a child was troublesome. Unable to bear her misery at ending so many pregnancies when she herself wants one so badly, she begins to kill her patients with Grell Sutcliffe and the two become known as Jack the Ripper. However, she cannot kill Ciel because she sees him as her own son. This causes Grell to turn on her and kill her.
For the second part, I'll write it from Grell's perspective, and the last part from Ciel's perspective.
Basically, three parts will be related to Madame Red.
Basically, the original plot line is like this:
In a manor house on the outskirts of Victorian era London, butler Sebastian Michaelis serves Lord Earl Ciel Phantomhive, the orphaned twelve-year-old head of an English noble family and a toy and candy empire, who serves directly under the Queen as her "guard dog". Sebastian carries out any task required by his master while solving the problems plaguing England with ease and perfection, because of his demonic lineage and Faustian contract with his master. The parents of Master Phantomhive estate were murdered when Ciel was younger. As a result, he made a deal with a demon asking for vengeance upon those who had disgraced him, and the Phantomhive name, in exchange for his soul.
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For the first part, I decided that I would like to write my story from Madame Red's Point of view.
Below is a brief description of Madame Red:
For the second part, I'll write it from Grell's perspective, and the last part from Ciel's perspective.
Basically, three parts will be related to Madame Red.
First Part of Re-Write
In a far away land, on top of mountains of sand, Princess Jasmine sits in her palace over looking the city below. Similar to the tucked away villages, Jasmine’s true desires are hidden from the rest of the world. The townspeople frown upon the royal family, scoffing at them when they stroll by on their chariots. Likewise, Jasmine’s father, the Sultan, and his advisor pick up their noses and scoff back. While this imbalance of power goes on, Jasmine secretly wishes to be one of the townspeople. She dreams of living a normal life away from the riches and away from the jewels. She doesn’t want to marry a prince or have the responsibilities that come along with being a princess. Everyday she wakes up feeling like an actress, putting on a show. Jasmine has to eat a certain way, dress a certain way, speak a certain way and even wave a certain way. She feels like no one really cares about her or what she really wants. After being stuck in this palace for so long, she is even beginning to forget who she really is.
On one summer day, Jasmine went into the Village to pick up some fruit. She usually has her servant do it for her but on this day, she insisted that she did it herself. She didn’t want to be isolated from the townspeople so she planned to dress herself in a way that would make her look as if she fit in. All of her princess clothes were covered in gold and jewels. It would be too obvious if she wore anything of her own, so she thought of a clever idea. She grabbed her old sheets and sewed them into a frock. She then took her pillowcase and turned it into a bonnet. She borrowed a pair of her servant’s sandals and went on her way. Jasmine knew that if she was caught leaving the palace in this type of attire she would be scorned and taken back to her room so she thought of a plan. She would wear her princess dress and pack her village clothes in a bag. Once she has made it out of the palace, she would hide behind the nearest barricade and change.
Jasmine managed to make it out of the palace without any question. As she was looking for a place to change her outfit, someone threw an egg at her and yelled “go back to your palace”. In tears, Jasmine ran as fast as she could into the nearest store. When she walked in, the store owner recognized her and got down on his knees to bow to her. She walked over to him, shaking her head.
“You don’t need to do that.” She lifted him up off the floor.
“But Princess, I insist.”
She brushed the dust off his clothes and smiled.
“I’m just like you. A regular person.”
“Princess, you are royalty. You aren’t like anybody down here in the village. You belong with the people in the palace.”
Jasmine sighed and plunked herself in a chair. She cupped her chin between her hands and dropped her eyes to the floor. She mumbled under her breath, “if only you knew what it was really like”. Her tiara dropped on the floor and one of the jewels broke off. The store owner picked it up and offered to fix it. In a daze, Jasmine didn’t respond. The owner said he needed to go pick up some superglue from down the road and he would be right back. He took the crown with him and walked out the door.
The sound of the door shutting snapped Jasmine back into reality. She looked around and noticed that no one was in site. She grabbed her clothes out of her bag and quickly changed. She threw her princess dress back in her bag and snuck out the back door. No one recognized her and it couldn’t of made her happier. On her way to the fruit stand, she noticed the shop owner walking towards her in the distance. She covered her face with her bonnet and looked the other way as they crossed paths. She noticed people laughing and children playing. She could hear birds singing and street musicians performing for coins. She leaned her head back, took a deep breath and smiled. This was the type of life she wanted to live.
Re-Write Idea
My idea for the re-write is based on the Disney movie Aladdin. For those of you who haven't seen it, it is the story of a regular village guy in the middle east who meets a princess and falls in love. But since the princess can only marry a prince, he has no chance to be with her. He is then captured by the evil Sultan's advisor and forced to help him in his plan to take over the world. While doing so, he comes across a lamp which holds a genie that gives him three wishes. He wishes to become Prince Ali to win Jasmine's affections, but he is caught. Sultan's advisor, Jafar, steals the lamp and gets three wishes of his own. Aladdin ends up saving the Princess and her father, the Sultan and in the end, the Sultan agrees to let Aladdin and Princess Jasmine be together.
Obviously, in this story, Aladdin is the one who is marginalized, but breaks through his trials and tribulations in the end. For my re-write, I want to focus on Jasmine being the marginalized one by putting her in the village and making the village people not accept her. I will make her the central character and by putting her in a situation where she doesn't belong, she will reveal what really goes on in the palace and how everyone takes it for granted. I am going to make her meet Aladdin and instead of Aladdin trying to become something he is not to be with her, Jasmine will try to fit into his world to be with him. In the end, she will make the villagers accept her and Jasmine and Aladdin will live happily ever after. :)
Hello everyone!!
I have an idea for the rewrite. I think that I'll take a case study of a Vietnam veteran fighting in the cancer disease. He is 52 year old. single and had no children.He lived alone.He was one of several siblings, but kept little contact with his siblings except for one brother who was his donor. His mother died when he was 16 apparently of a brain tumor, his father died few years ago.
He had a drinking problem in the past. At the hospital he was in isolation because of the ramifications of his illness.
In my rewrite ,I'll write from the eyes of his family. How his family felt and thought of being not in contact with him?.,why he disconnected the relationship with his family?, what happened to his family during all this years when he was away?, The trials to find him.
He had a drinking problem in the past. At the hospital he was in isolation because of the ramifications of his illness.
In my rewrite ,I'll write from the eyes of his family. How his family felt and thought of being not in contact with him?.,why he disconnected the relationship with his family?, what happened to his family during all this years when he was away?, The trials to find him.
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