Wednesday, August 31, 2011

Hilly Holbrook - The Help



I have chosen to base my re write on the film "The Help". My re write will be based on Hilly Holbrook who is a white lady that has no respect what so ever for the Black Race. This is a quick overview of Hilly as an adult - Hilly's world and vision – her ignorance about the lives and traditions of African people with her patronizing attitude toward them, mirrors her ideas about the black people in her own community. She believes that the black people in Jackson are poor because they are lazy and don't spend money wisely, and therefore don't even deserve a living wage.

I am going to write when she was a child and to why she has so much hate for the Black/African community, did something happen when she was a child?

It will also incorporate what the Black/ African maid's point of view is.

I will incorporate more in my re write when i have done more research, this is just a little outline of how i will do this re write.

Monday, August 29, 2011

Re-Write info

























Before i start posting my Re-Write i thought i would give you a little back information on 'The Help' So you understand my Re-Write a little better.

The Help is set in 1962 in the small town of Jackon Mississippi. It is about African American maids working in white households. is told from the point of view of three narrators: Aibileen Clark, a middle-aged African-American maid who has spent her life raising white children, and who has recently lost her only son; Minny Jackson, an African-American maid whose back-talk towards her employers results in her having to frequently change jobs, exacerbating her desperate need for work as well as her family's struggle with money; and Eugenia "Skeeter" Phelan, a young white woman and recent college graduate who, after moving back home, discovers that a maid that helped raise her since childhood has abruptly disappeared and her attempts to find her have come to naught. The stories of the three women intertwine to explain how life in Jackson, Mississippi revolves around "the help", with complex relations of power, money, emotion, and intimacy tying together the white and black families of Jackson.

My Re-Write is going to focus on Celia Foote who hires Minny Jackson to be her maid. She is the newest resident of Jackson and doesnt know lines are drawn so treats Minny the same as she would treat any white person; she even eats dinner with Minny which is unknown. Im going to focues on Celia's life before Jackson, go into her back story as to why she feels so comfortable around Minny - a black maid. How she met Johnny Foote and go further into her point of view in her time leading up to Jackson. I think it will be really intersting to get an outsiders point of view in all of this and im really enjoying what i have written so far.

Thursday, August 25, 2011

Second Part of Rewrite


In a far away land, on top of mountains of sand, Princess Jasmine sits in her palace over looking the city below. Similar to the tucked away villages, Jasmine’s true desires are hidden from the rest of the world. The townspeople frown upon the royal family, scoffing at them when they stroll by on their chariots. Likewise, Jasmine’s father, the Sultan, and his advisor pick up their noses and scoff back. While this imbalance of power goes on, Jasmine secretly wishes to be one of the townspeople. She dreams of living a normal life away from the riches and away from the jewels. She doesn’t want to marry a prince or have the responsibilities that come along with being a princess. Everyday she wakes up feeling like an actress, putting on a show. Jasmine has to eat a certain way, dress a certain way, speak a certain way and even wave a certain way. She feels like no one really cares about her or what she really wants. After being stuck in this palace for so long, she is even beginning to forget who she really is.

On one summer day, Jasmine went into the Village to pick up some fruit. She usually has her servant do it for her but on this day, she insisted that she did it herself. She didn’t want to be isolated from the townspeople so she planned to dress herself in a way that would make her look as if she fit in. All of her princess clothes were covered in gold and jewels. It would be too obvious if she wore anything of her own, so she thought of a clever idea. She grabbed her old sheets and sewed them into a frock. She then took her pillowcase and turned it into a bonnet. She borrowed a pair of her servant’s sandals and went on her way. Jasmine knew that if she was caught leaving the palace in this type of attire she would be scorned and taken back to her room so she thought of a plan. She would wear her princess dress and pack her village clothes in a bag. Once she has made it out of the palace, she would hide behind the nearest barricade and change.

Jasmine managed to make it out of the palace without any question. As she was looking for a place to change her outfit, someone threw an egg at her and yelled “go back to your palace”. In tears, Jasmine ran as fast as she could into the nearest store. When she walked in, the store owner recognized her and got down on his knees to bow to her. She walked over to him, shaking her head.

“You don’t need to do that.” She lifted him up off the floor.

“But Princess, I insist.”

She brushed the dust off his clothes and smiled.

“I’m just like you. A regular person.”

“Princess, you are royalty. You aren’t like anybody down here in the village. You belong with the people in the palace.”

Jasmine sighed and plunked herself in a chair. She cupped her chin between her hands and dropped her eyes to the floor. She mumbled under her breath, “if only you knew what it was really like”. Her tiara dropped on the floor and one of the jewels broke off. The store owner picked it up and offered to fix it. In a daze, Jasmine didn’t respond. The owner said he needed to go pick up some superglue from down the road and he would be right back. He took the crown with him and walked out the door.

The sound of the door shutting snapped Jasmine back into reality. She looked around and noticed that no one was in site. She grabbed her clothes out of her bag and quickly changed. She threw her princess dress back in her bag and snuck out the back door. No one recognized her and it couldn’t of made her happier. On her way to the fruit stand, she noticed the shop owner walking towards her in the distance. She covered her face with her bonnet and looked the other way as they crossed paths. She noticed people laughing and children playing. She could hear birds singing and street musicians performing for coins. She leaned her head back, took a deep breath and smiled. This was the type of life she wanted to live.  

Remembering what she came down here for, Jasmine headed towards the fruit stand. There was one stand in particular that she always went to. It had the sweetest melons in the whole village. She looked forward to eating these melons every week. It was her special treat that always kept her happy even in the palace. The shop keeper always gave Jasmine the biggest one. Of course this was because she was the princess. But nonetheless, she was always flattered and tipped him generously.

She walked several blocks and turned down the lane with all the wooden stands. People were selling weaved baskets, jewelry and gum. As she got closer to the stand, she noticed that the barrels were empty. The tables were clear and the sign was taken down. She ran up to the stand to ask the shopkeeper where everything was, but he was gone. Not a sweet melon in site. Jasmine looked around to see if there was somebody she could ask. She walked over to the nearest stand, which was selling baguettes. Beside were two little kids with ripped clothing and dirty hands. Jasmine smiled at them but they shied away and ran behind the stand. She looked up and noticed a charming young man working there. He took a baguette, ripped it in half and handed it to the children. They took a few bites and ran down the road with the rest of the loaf in there hand.

“Excuse me sir, do you know where the fruit stand went? The one across the road with the most delicious melons?”

An older, heavier woman ran up to the young man and grabbed him by the ear, dragging him away from the shop.

“It’s probably closed down because this street rat stole it all.” The woman looked back at the young man. “What did I tell you about giving my loafs to those homeless kids.”

“I’m sorry Mrs. Leante, I won’t do it again.”

“That’s what you always say. Now scram.”
The young boy smiled at Jasmine, grabbed his bag and walked away. He was followed by a little monkey who climbed up his back and sat on his shoulder. Jasmine was impressed at the young man’s kind gesture and his handsome smile made her blush. But she was a bit confused about the monkey. She giggled to herself and shrugged it off. The real shopkeeper, the older woman, walked up to Jasmine and put her hand on her shoulder.

“I’m sorry miss, but the fruit stand shopkeeper died last week so they had to close down his store.”

“Oh no, that is so horrible. What happened to him?”

“Not sure.” The woman squinted her eyes and leaned in closer to Jasmine’s face. “You look familiar.”

Not wanting to blow her disguise, Jasmine quickly covered her face and started to walk away.

“I don’t think we’ve met. I have to go now. Thank you for your help.”

She kept walking down the street so far until she came to a place she had never been before. It was a beautiful stream of water. She laid down her bag and took a seat. Jasmine felt sad for the old shopkeeper and wondered what could have happened to him. She looked out along the stream and took a deep breathe. Next moment, a hand holding a melon flew over her shoulder and was held next to her cheek. She quickly turned around and saw the face of the young man from the baguette stand.

“They are the sweetest in the village.”

Jasmine couldn’t believe her eyes. She was thrilled. She wondered how he found her here. Wanting to look cool, calm and collected, she went with, “I don’t think melons get sweeter then the ones from the stand that closed down.”

“Oh, trust me. These are sweeter. I’ve tried them all.”

The young boy took a nearby stick and shoved it into the ground. He then took the melon and cracked it in half over the stick. He handed one piece to Jasmine and kept the other for himself.

“Take a bite.”

Jasmine ate a little piece and was amazed. He was right. It was sweeter then anything she had ever tasted. Her eyes lit up and the young man sat down beside her and smiled.

“I told you.” He took a bite of his half. “I’m Aladdin and this is Abu.” He pointed to the monkey hiding behind his back. The monkey ran around and jumped on Jasmine’s lap. Jasmine laughed, awed and pet his head. Aladdin grabbed him and put him down beside them.

“Abu, that’s no way to treat a lady.” He placed the melon on the floor for Abu to eat. “What’s your name?”

Jasmine was in LaLa land. “I’m Ja..” Once she realized what she was doing she tried to cover it up. “ja...” She stumbled on her word. “Jambalaya”.

Aladdin scrunched his eyebrows in disbelief. “Jambalaya?”

“Yea. Well, Jambalaya is just my nickname. My real name is…”

She was interrupted by Aladdin leaning in closer and saying, “you look familiar”.

“Sheesh, I’ve been getting that a lot today. Must have one of those familiar faces.” Jasmine sneakily pulled her bonnet down to cover more of her face and looked the other way.

Aladdin held her chin between his thumb and pointer finger and turned her face back towards him. “No, I’ve seen you before.”

“I don’t think so.” Jasmine tries to subtlety pull away, but Aladdin doesn’t give in. He looks ever closer and gaps. He drops his hands and yells, “you’re Princess Jasmine.”

Freaked out that people might have heard, Jasmine covers Aladdin’s mouth and shushes him. Aladdin slowly pulls her hand off and whispers, “Princess Jasmine?”

Jasmine bows her head in shame. “Fine, you caught me.”

“What are you doing down here in the village Princess. And dressed like that?”

Jasmine explains to Aladdin everything she was feeling. Why she has to hide. Why she likes it down here so much better then in the palace. How she feels trapped. Jasmine and Aladdin ended up talking until sun down. Jasmine said it was getting late and that the Sultan will start looking for her now. She said goodbye and asked if she could see him again. He told her of course and that he would be around whenever she came down.

On her way back to the palace, she couldn’t get Aladdin out of her head. She dreamed of a life in the village. She thought about how simple it would be and how much happier she would feel. She imagined being with Aladdin, but knew that it could never happen. Her father and his advisor would never let a village boy into the palace and the village people would never accept her as Jasmine. She thought about disguising herself forever, but if in only a few hours people already noticed her, she knew that her identity would be given away if she lived there for good. She quickly changed back into her princess clothes beside the palace and walked inside sad and blue. She said goodnight to the Sultan and locked herself in her room. She laid on her bed and cried herself to sleep.

The next day, Jasmine woke up feeling rejuvenated and confident. She decided that she was going to go back into the village to see Aladdin dressed as a princess. She didn’t care what it took, but she was willing to do it. She felt that strongly about him and she wanted to make it work.

Hang's rewrite 1st draft

American bullet.

Another story of "Miss Saigon".

I still couldn't believe that I was killed until I felt no longer belong to my body, no more warmth could I feel from the air. I was killed, one shot in the head by my most beloved one, unbelievable. This whole mess was… unbelievable.

Southern Vietnam in the early of 1960s was chaos. Our village was already so poor when the government came and took the rest of the food. I was only four. All I could remember was my mom hugging a soldier’s leg, begging him to leave us some rice. “My child, please have mercy for my child. I beg you. Please think of the poor boy.” She said, voice trembled in tear but nothing she could do to get back what was taken. He kicked her over and over, tried to shake her off. I remember he said something like “be honourable” and “for the nation”. And then they left, the soldiers, with our food, drained our village to its last drop. Nothing left for us to live onto. That night Kim’s mother and mine left us and head to the wood. Kim was crying when her mother gave her to me, “she hasn’t got anything to eat for the whole day, the poor girl” she said, I could see her trying so hard not to cry. My mother gave us two tiny roll of burned rice leftover from yesterday and then they left. Kim cried louder and I couldn’t help but join her. I was four years old and Kim was two at the time.

As we grew up, we’d gotten used to the sign of the soldier coming to the village to take away the food. It wasn’t a pain to people anymore, as if giving their food away is a part of their life, produce food, give them away, produce more food and then give them away. Before we even know how to talk, we already know field work. Before we could even harvest the rice, they are already taken away. In the end of the day, the girls followed their mother to the wood, and brought home some wild vegetable and bulbs. Thanks to that, we continued on living.

One day, as mother gave us half of her dinner as usual, father refused it and said to her “We can’t live like this any longer. I can’t live on feeling like eating your blood, your flesh like this anymore. You eat it.” Mother looked at him, she started to sob “But dear, if you don’t eat enough, you won’t be able to work, we won’t get enough food for the soldiers, they will kill us.” “I will think of something,” he said, “can’t be poor forever.” He said, and the next morning he disappeared, and the morning after that, and the whole week, and the whole month, and one day he came back, his shirt dyed with what we thought was blood, he gave us a bag of rice and then run away without saying anything. The next day soldiers came again, with time with some big white foreigners.

Nat's Re-write idea

Hey guys
So I was having a bit of trouble fully grasping the themes I wanted to convey in my re-write, and also trouble coming with an appropriate original text. After talking to Aimee about choosing a text that might be of more interest to me, she suggested song lyrics. I have also decided I want to address other post-colonial themes other than just race relations.
Therefore, my idea has evolved into using lyrics from a Metallica song called 'Unforgiven', which is about an oppressed boy, and developing that into a story of post-colonial loss of identity and decolonisation. I want to use 'kiwi-english' and try something new by telling half the story from the boy's POV and half from another sideline character's POV.

I'm feeling much better about the re-write now that I have something more appropriate to my interests to focus on!
Hope everyone else is going well.
Nat

Wednesday, August 24, 2011

Qunhua's rewrite

No one knows what would happen next and since the new cruise commenced, it would be have to travel to many big states around the global. At that time, many huge landd were have already been occupied by European countries. Many would wish that they would acquire greater wealth from these occupied states. Captain Marlow and his crew were thinking of gold, silver and jewellery. As it when they stopped over at a big port like Guangzhou of China, it would be a place full of treasures.

The resounding horns, passengers have started boarding the ship. There were scenes of cries, hugs, and the opportunistic traders who tried their last minute ditch to make more moneies from selling their sutff to the passengers. Here, there was a old lady fortune teller bending at waist trembling in the crowd, in her hand she carred a string of shell and gem stones that become the center of attraction of the crowd.

The sparkling ray filled the mystical illusion and the ranbow colors were so maystifuing that the poeple were unable to neglect its existence. The old lady started chanting and her lips could not stop her whispers as it was talking to oneself or it was a curse but on one could understand. Where did this old lady came from? Nobody knew. The mysterious old lady as if was descended from the sky, even those busy hawkers were mystified by her present. they started whispering, trying to eavesdrop her whereabouts, however, nobody knew. Thd dismayed and disapointed Miss Adela who determined to leave alone, went on a sightseeing cave tour to ease her mind, her mind was completely blank, she did not want to recall anything about her first ovearsea trip in her life. Prior to her arrival, she had great expectation and dreams, and as a result of the trip to India, all her dreams and hopes were shattered, especially what had happened in the cave sightseeing tour. She only had her pride and dignity to remind her.

In fact, there was only a ray of light from the cave, what happened was a mater of induction or perception. She did not want or need to explain, she just wanted to leave this sorrowful place which was a colony of England- a place she deemed as chaotic and low -class. Her fiance did not stop her insistence to leave this city, her engagement as a result of this was called off. No one knew what would happen next.












Qunhua's rewrite plan.

Several weeks,  I have been thinking about my rewrite. Finally, I got two ideas, one is "Heart of Darkness by Joseph Conrad" and another one is "A Passage to India by E.M. Forster". Bothe of stories were under post-colonislism. I would like to include two similar background stories and combine into one as a basis to rewrite a story.

At the same time, i will like to place the main actores of the two stories into a new journey, one being a captain Marlow who just started his firt journey from India returning to England. After having encountered indecent event, miss Adela who started travel back to her homeland-England. She boarded the cruise piloted by captain Marlow and his cruise. Concering Marlow, he and his four cruise, having surivived the encounted had become experienced in piloting the cruise/ship.

To them concerned, not only a start of good luck, it is also a new life beginning for their fate. Although they cruised from India, carried goods which  were inexpensive, they also carried thousands of passengers. To miss Adela in a confused journey from India, perhaps, she would have been forced to cancel the wedding engagement, one's who borne th pains of desperation in her journey back home...

Tuesday, August 23, 2011

Hang's rewrite idea.

I was thinking to rewrite the musical show "Miss Saigon". "Miss Saigon" is the story of Kim, a 17 year old Vietnamese orphan who became prostitute in a bar in Saigon to earn for her living. The story started in the beginning of 1975, just some months before American soldiers were completely swiped off Vietnam. Kim met Chris, an American GI on her first day at the bar and the two felt in love. On the day they got married, Kim' cousin, Thuy, to whom she was arranged to marry to at the age of 13 by her parents, came to take her home with him. Chris made Thuy leave the place without Kim and they continued to live happily until the news about Viet Cong going to take Saigon came to tear them apart. Failed to take Kim with him to America, Chris left Vietnam with the promise that he will come back for her.

Three years passed, Chris still couldn't come back due to political issue between America and Vietnam. Chris was married to another woman but Kim was still waiting. Thuy, now became a government commissar, came look for her and determined to bring her home. There she revealed to him that she had a child with Chris so she couldn't come with him. Thuy tried to kill the child but was killed by Kim instead.

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My rewrite will tell Thuy's story and his hatre upon American, which also portrait how people that follows Viet Cong thought about American and the so-called Vietnamese War. It tell the story from the other side, where people believe that the true intension of America back then was to take control of Vietnam and its resource, not to save the world from Communism like Americans always think.


Monday, August 22, 2011

Rewrite Plan

The Salem with trials have always been interesting to me. Loved studying them at school. So I'm thinking I will do my "rewrite" on 'the Crucible'. I'm thinking that I'll write about how John Proctor and Abigail Williams have an affair, which takes place before both the movie and the play. Kind of like Wide Sargasso Sea. However, I plan on having Tituba, the black maid, tell the story, as if Abigail has told her all about her exploits with John and her plans and such. It will end with Abigail's actions making Tituba think that she is declaring her revenge on the Proctors' finally when the witch accusations turn into a full-blown hunt. Probably diary entry format.

Let me know if you think this is gonna fail because I'm not sure if it has enough body to make 3000 words out of it. Should make a good tragedy if I can pull it off though!

(I put rewrite in speech marks because that's what the title of the assignment is called but it isn't really what we're doing considering this is more of a parallel short story than a complete rewrite of the original play/movie)

Sunday, August 21, 2011

Sarah Hosking - First Re-write Draft

I've decided after much thinking to re-write SHE by H.R. Haggard. BEWARE, TYPOS AND GRAMMAR ERROS GALORE

Amahagger Tribe was located deep in the mainland of Africa. There lived Ballali and his people. Once under the spell and harsh control of "SHE" this was no longer true. Outsiders had come from a far away place and rid them of "SHE". He wasn't sure how this could be true, as "SHE" was a particularly powerful woman who had never shown a weakness. Because if he had seen it, she would of been gone and he would of taken control of his people. In truth, it wasn't control he wanted, it was freedom. If it was true that "SHE" was gone and that they were free to live how they wanted then this could only be a good thing. But what now worried Ballali was her return. The Outsiders, who had now become his friends had told him of her possible reincarnation. This arouse many worries in Ballali. The most important one being the fact he'd let the Outsiders go. Not only that, but he had personally escorted them. One solution remained in Ballali's mind. He must leave, or make it seem as though he had left.
A number of years later a chance showed itself. Another Outsider arrived on the Marshes which lay on the outskirts of their province. Ballali was at once shaken awake.
"Juta, what is it my son?" Ballali spoke.
The Amahagger were a incredibly respectful society. Son's were not of blood but a term of respect. Ballali being one of the eldest people in the Amahagger was treated with the greatest respect and was almost always addressed firstly as 'Father'.
"Sorry to awaken you Father but Ubwa and Abuu just returned from the Marshes with reports of Outsiders. What is your wish My Father? Are we to return with them for supper?"
"Ney, ready my cart. I want to speak with these men, I warn you now young Juta, your last feast on flesh will have been the last."
Ballali got to his feet, no longer young and easy to rise. But not yet old enough to give up. The opportunity he had been waiting for finally had come to pass.
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50 years later
Worlds away in the lands north of the Amahaggers province, Ballali's fears were soon to be realised. Ayesha woke with a start, as if she had been startled awake from a dream that had been tormenting her. The cave was black and cold. She stood and brought her hands to her face and starred. Still beautiful and pearly white and wrinkless, despite her 2000 years or so, on earth. She wasn't clothed and knew this would become a problem. Where was she and how did she come to be here? It would seem that no memories had been lost in her reincarnation and these hit her all at once. Ayesha strided towards the stone wall directly infront of her and using her supernatural powers held out her hands and blasted a hole the size of a fully grown elephant through the walls exposing a beam of white light.

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Thursday, August 18, 2011

My re-write idea

I've decided to do a rewrite base on an anime/manga called Kuroshitsuji (Black Butler).

Basically, the original plot line is like this:
In a manor house on the outskirts of Victorian era London, butler Sebastian Michaelis serves Lord Earl Ciel Phantomhive, the orphaned twelve-year-old head of an English noble family and a toy and candy empire, who serves directly under the Queen as her "guard dog". Sebastian carries out any task required by his master while solving the problems plaguing England with ease and perfection, because of his demonic lineage and Faustian contract with his master. The parents of Master Phantomhive estate were murdered when Ciel was younger. As a result, he made a deal with a demon asking for vengeance upon those who had disgraced him, and the Phantomhive name, in exchange for his soul.

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For the first part, I decided that I would like to write my story from Madame Red's Point of view.

Below is a brief description of Madame Red:
Madame Red, born Angelina Durless, was Ciel's aunt. As her title suggests, she was known for her red appearance and clothing. Initially she hated her red hair, which she inherited from her father, until Ciel's father, Vincent, said he liked it. Angelina fell in love with him, but became distraught when she found out her sister was marrying him. Madame Red later married Baron Barnett, who treated her lovingly and gently, stating that he does not mind that she harbors feelings for another. She obtained a medical license against the wishes of her parents and practiced at the Royal London Hospital. After a carriage accident in which her husband was killed, her womb and unborn child had to be removed. This causes her great strife as a doctor because she regularly performs abortions on prostitutes because they believe having a child was troublesome. Unable to bear her misery at ending so many pregnancies when she herself wants one so badly, she begins to kill her patients with Grell Sutcliffe and the two become known as Jack the Ripper. However, she cannot kill Ciel because she sees him as her own son. This causes Grell to turn on her and kill her.

For the second part, I'll write it from Grell's perspective, and the last part from Ciel's perspective.
Basically, three parts will be related to Madame Red.

First Part of Re-Write


In a far away land, on top of mountains of sand, Princess Jasmine sits in her palace over looking the city below. Similar to the tucked away villages, Jasmine’s true desires are hidden from the rest of the world. The townspeople frown upon the royal family, scoffing at them when they stroll by on their chariots. Likewise, Jasmine’s father, the Sultan, and his advisor pick up their noses and scoff back. While this imbalance of power goes on, Jasmine secretly wishes to be one of the townspeople. She dreams of living a normal life away from the riches and away from the jewels. She doesn’t want to marry a prince or have the responsibilities that come along with being a princess. Everyday she wakes up feeling like an actress, putting on a show. Jasmine has to eat a certain way, dress a certain way, speak a certain way and even wave a certain way. She feels like no one really cares about her or what she really wants. After being stuck in this palace for so long, she is even beginning to forget who she really is.

On one summer day, Jasmine went into the Village to pick up some fruit. She usually has her servant do it for her but on this day, she insisted that she did it herself. She didn’t want to be isolated from the townspeople so she planned to dress herself in a way that would make her look as if she fit in. All of her princess clothes were covered in gold and jewels. It would be too obvious if she wore anything of her own, so she thought of a clever idea. She grabbed her old sheets and sewed them into a frock. She then took her pillowcase and turned it into a bonnet. She borrowed a pair of her servant’s sandals and went on her way. Jasmine knew that if she was caught leaving the palace in this type of attire she would be scorned and taken back to her room so she thought of a plan. She would wear her princess dress and pack her village clothes in a bag. Once she has made it out of the palace, she would hide behind the nearest barricade and change.

Jasmine managed to make it out of the palace without any question. As she was looking for a place to change her outfit, someone threw an egg at her and yelled “go back to your palace”. In tears, Jasmine ran as fast as she could into the nearest store. When she walked in, the store owner recognized her and got down on his knees to bow to her. She walked over to him, shaking her head.

“You don’t need to do that.” She lifted him up off the floor.

“But Princess, I insist.”

She brushed the dust off his clothes and smiled.

“I’m just like you. A regular person.”

“Princess, you are royalty. You aren’t like anybody down here in the village. You belong with the people in the palace.”

Jasmine sighed and plunked herself in a chair. She cupped her chin between her hands and dropped her eyes to the floor. She mumbled under her breath, “if only you knew what it was really like”. Her tiara dropped on the floor and one of the jewels broke off. The store owner picked it up and offered to fix it. In a daze, Jasmine didn’t respond. The owner said he needed to go pick up some superglue from down the road and he would be right back. He took the crown with him and walked out the door.

The sound of the door shutting snapped Jasmine back into reality. She looked around and noticed that no one was in site. She grabbed her clothes out of her bag and quickly changed. She threw her princess dress back in her bag and snuck out the back door. No one recognized her and it couldn’t of made her happier. On her way to the fruit stand, she noticed the shop owner walking towards her in the distance. She covered her face with her bonnet and looked the other way as they crossed paths. She noticed people laughing and children playing. She could hear birds singing and street musicians performing for coins. She leaned her head back, took a deep breath and smiled. This was the type of life she wanted to live.  

Re-Write Idea

My idea for the re-write is based on the Disney movie Aladdin. For those of you who haven't seen it, it is the story of a regular village guy in the middle east who meets a princess and falls in love. But since the princess can only marry a prince, he has no chance to be with her. He is then captured by the evil Sultan's advisor and forced to help him in his plan to take over the world. While doing so, he comes across a lamp which holds a genie that gives him three wishes. He wishes to become Prince Ali to win Jasmine's affections, but he is caught. Sultan's advisor, Jafar, steals the lamp and gets three wishes of his own. Aladdin ends up saving the Princess and her father, the Sultan and in the end, the Sultan agrees to let Aladdin and Princess Jasmine be together. 

Obviously, in this story, Aladdin is the one who is marginalized, but breaks through his trials and tribulations in the end. For my re-write, I want to focus on Jasmine being the marginalized one by putting her in the village and making the village people not accept her. I will make her the central character and by putting her in a situation where she doesn't belong, she will reveal what really goes on in the palace and how everyone takes it for granted. I am going to make her meet Aladdin and instead of Aladdin trying to become something he is not to be with her, Jasmine will try to fit into his world to be with him. In the end, she will make the villagers accept her and Jasmine and Aladdin will live happily ever after. :)

Hello everyone!!

I have an idea for the rewrite. I think that I'll take a case study of a Vietnam veteran fighting in the cancer disease. He is 52 year old. single and had no children.He lived alone.He was one of several siblings, but kept little contact with his siblings except for one brother who was his donor. His mother died when he was 16 apparently of a brain tumor, his father died few years ago.
He had a drinking problem in the past. At the hospital he was in isolation because of the ramifications of his illness.
In my rewrite ,I'll write from the eyes of his family. How his family felt and thought of being not in contact with him?.,why he disconnected the relationship with his family?, what happened to his family during all this years when he was away?, The trials to find him.








Wednesday, August 17, 2011

KELSEY DUNCAN


For some reason Kelsey Duncan has been removed from the group - she will sort it out with the lecture on Thursday. But for now, she is thinking of doing her Re-Write on Rabbit Proof Fence or The Help. She will also update as she goes, and once she can view this. The video below is the trailer of the film.

My Re-Write


I have decided to do my Re-Write on the film/Novel 'The Help' i thought it was an amazing film and has a lot of potential for a Re-Write. I will update pieces of it to this group once i get started. I have a few ideas now, just going to focus on writing.

Thursday, August 11, 2011

The First Australians


Hi all I encourage you to watch "The First Australians" every Tuesday 8.30pm Maori TV. Following that is "Blackstone" & then Indigenous Insight at 10.30pm. Super awesome to be informed about other populations and its helpful for our studies too :).

Thursday, August 4, 2011

Aspects of Confirmed angle for Re-Write 

Theme: Marginilised

- Low occupations, low pay, long hours, living in the projects. Two worlds colliding between the parents = Mother holding fast to the ways of her Island & the purpose of their migration. Father comfortable, celebrating the freedom they & their daughter have in the USA.

My Rewrite Ideas continued

How She Move Trailer 


How She Move Summary 

My idea is to rewrite some scenes from this movie (see link, trailer & movie summary). Ray the main character, her parents are Jamaican immigrants, she is second generations Jamaican, born and bred in New York. I think I will take on the parents perspective, or a male character or her dead sisters' P.O.V.

Thursday, 28 July 2011

Re-Write Brainstorm.

Lyrics and exploration of the Supernatural in my Re-Write? 

Reference

Youtube. Retrieved July 29, 2011, from:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kbi9I8v-KPE

Wednesday, 27 July 2011


Obeah OR Voodoo in my Re-write?...maybe?
Song by the Neville Brothers "Voodoo Woman"

References

Youtube.Retrieved August 4, 2011, from: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nBxbLVYrwOo



Post Colonization "Angola Bound" Neville Brothers

Further Ideas for my re-write may be inspired by this song.  

Reference
YouTube. Retrieved July 28, 2011, from: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WO1bn1qKu7A

Tuesday, 26 July 2011

Supernatural Elements in my Re_Write

Thinking of the title the song that came straight to mind was "Voodoo Woman" song by the Neville Brothers, especially after reading about Christophine and reading the critical analysis in our Critical Reader for this paper. Here are the lyrics to that song (this process is helping me to brainstorm my Re-write). 

Song link from Youtube:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nBxbLVYrwOo&feature=related

Voodoo Lyrics
The Neville Brothers

Oh you must a put Voodoo on me - Oh you must a cast a spell
The way I’m loving you girl – Ain’t no tongue can tell
Oh you must a been burning candles – Oh to make a love so strong
You must a sprinkled dust all around my bed – You must a had a
black cat bone

Just at a glance – You know you put me in a trance
Oh when I look into your eyes – Girl you have me hypnotized
Oh you must a put Voodoo on me - Oh you must a cast a spell
The way you got me loving you girl – Ain’t no tongue can tell
Solo 8 bars
Solo 8 bars
Oh, if I call on Magnolia could she break this spell on me
Father Black Hawk or Mother Dora - I wonder could they set me free

Oh you must a put Voodoo on me - Oh you must a cast a spell
The way you got me loving you girl – Ain’t no tongue can tell
Voodoo woman –Voodoo woman
Voodoo woman –Voodoo woman
Solo 4 bars - end
 
References

Lyrics. Retrieved July 28, 2011, from: http://www.lyricsvip.com/The-Neville-Brothers/Voodoo-Lyrics.html

Youtube.com. Retrieved, July 28, 2011, from: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nBxbLVYrwOo&feature=related

More Re_Write Ideas

Mythology: Hinemoa and Tutanekai_Loch Ness Crossover set in this current era.Voodoo parallels_Dr Facilier. Canvas for the story, underground Hip Hop Realm.

Sunday, 24 July 2011

To do list!

Read More Examples! Still not certain about the angle I will be taking yet.

Wednesday, 20 July 2011

Ideas for Brief One

After reading the 2010 Re-write examples. I think I'm interested in possibly infusing these genre's & stories into my work. 
  • Choose a mythology Asia/Polynesian(maybe several)
  • A Martial Arts film "Crouching Tiger" 
  • Movie "Queen" Starring Haylee Berry
 I will read more examples and chew over ideas before finalizing the direction I will take. 

Tuesday, August 2, 2011

Blogging

Hi to all the New Literatures students for 2011!

It's a great idea to add your ideas for the REWRITE assessment to the Blog as you develop them - you could get useful feedback from both lecturers and fellow students.

You may have several ideas to begin with - put them all up and see what everyone thinks!
I'm sure no-one will steal your ideas :)

You can brainstorm on the blog too, or post possible REWRITE plans/ outlines.

Also, add your drafts as you go. The lecturers will not assume these are your final copies, and other blog members can comment on your work.

GOOD LUCK!!